Writing for precision and accuracy
- Describe the picture in one paragraph
- Swap descriptions
- Try to draw the picture that your partner described
- Write down any expressions that you would need to learn in order to describe this picture
First person: (includes the thoughts and perspective of one main character, who's telling his/her own story)
As I walked up the hill, I realized that the atmosphere was just too quiet. There was no sound from the cardinal who was nearly always singing from the top of the maple tree. I thought I saw a shadow move high up on the slope, but when I looked again it was gone. Still, I shuddered as I felt a silent threat pass over me like a cloud over the sun.
Third person selective singular: (includes the thoughts and perspective of one main character)
As she walked up the hill, she realized that the atmosphere was just too quiet. There was no sound from the cardinal who she so often heard singing from the top of the maple tree. She thought she saw a shadow move high up on the slope, but when she looked again it was gone. Nevertheless, she shuddered as she felt a silent threat pass over her. It felt like a cloud creeping over the sun.
Third person omniscient: (all-knowing; can include thoughts and perspective of all characters)
As the girl walked up the hill, she realized that the atmosphere was just too quiet.
The cardinal tipped his head back and drew breath to sing, but just as the first note passed his beak he heard the crack of a dead branch far below his perch high in the maple tree. Startled, he looked down, cocking his head to one side and watching with great interest while the man rattled the blades of grass as he tried to hide himself behind the tree.
As the man saw her start up the hill, he moved quickly into the shelter of the huge old maple tree. If she saw him now, everything would be ruined.
She thought she saw a shadow move high up on the slope, but when she looked again it was gone.
The man thought if he could stay hidden until she came within range, she'd have to talk to him. Wouldn't she?
The girl shuddered as she felt a silent threat pass over her. It felt like a cloud creeping over the sun.
* Blog HW: Please upload your short story to by Thursday, November 15th at 12:00 noon. You can use either of the two clips above, or you can try writing about a personal experience. Be sure that you write the story from a third person omniscent perspective. At means you should include the perspectives (thoughts, feelings, perceptions) of two to three people from the clip. We will talk about these in more detail next week.
HW #2: Find a short story (written in English) that you really like. You can find a number of great examples at this website. Please choose one story, print it out, and bring it to class next week, November, 16
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