Peer Editing and Final Class

First....  a reminder, Final Portfolios are due on December 14th, at 1:00pm in class.  Sorry, but NO LATE PORTFOLIOS WILL BE ACCEPTED!!!  You can find the requirements for the portfolios on the blog, and you can find each of the handouts for Functional Outlines and Outlines on the blog as well.

The Rubric for the Portfolios is as follows:

Total Score:  40 points
Final Drafts:  10 points each
Inclusion of all other materials 10 points

Final Drafts will be scored as follows:

Descriptive writing:

_____(5) Use sensory description—show the reader, rather than telling the reader what is happening in the essay

_____(5)  The paper should have a clear purpose

Reporting: 

_____(3)  Report on a particular event.  Answer the ‘wh’ questions related to this event

_____(4)  Introduce a relevant issue that is related to the events reported on

_____(3)  Show multiple perspectives on this particular issue

Short Story: 

_____(3)  Consistently use one ‘voice’ when telling the story

                      (1^st person / 3^rd person limited / 3^rd person omniscient)

_____(3)  Include a vivid description of a setting that is relevant for your story

_____(4)  The story should offer a clear conflict and resolution 

Descriptive writing genre, you can find the Outline on the entry from September 27.

Reporting genre, you can find the Functional outline and Outline on the entry from October 18.

Short stories genre, you can find the Functional outline and Outline on the entry from November 22.

Please feel free to drop me an e-mail if you have any questions.



Extra Credit Blog Assignment: 
visit http://www.koreabang.com/ 
select one news story and write an opinion about the news story
Try to offer a new or unique perspective on the events and give your readers a chance to understand them in a new way. 




For the Peer editing today, please fill out the table I gave you while LISTENING to your partner's story.  On the back of the paper please answer the following questions:



What do you feel is the point of this story?  

Which details are the most memorable?  

What kind of person is the main character?  How do you know? 

What is the conflict in the story? 

How is the conflict resolved?  

What do you feel are the strongest and weakest points of the story? 

November 23- Short Stories

"The Cask of Amontillado" by Edgar Allen Poe (adapted)

Characters: 

List each of the main characters: 

What are their names?

What kinds of people are they? 

What important details do we learn about each character? 

Setting:

Where does this take place? What various settings do we read about?

What details do we learn about the various settings? 

What feeling do you get from the settings of the story?  Why? 

Conflict: 

What is the major conflict? 

Why is this conflict important to the characters in the story?  What motivates the main character?

How is the conflict resolved? 

Structure of a Story

Abstract- tells the reader/listener that a story is about to begin

Orientation- identifies the time, place, characters, and the basic situation of the story 

Complicating Action- an unusual, special, or interesting event that makes the story interesting (answers the question "then what happened?")

Resolution- the conclusion of the narrative events / how the conflict ends ("answers the question, what finally happened? / how did it end?")

Evaluation- clarifies the point of the story (answers the question, "so what?")

Coda- signals that the story has ended

My story

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Outline for Creative Writing Genre

For your short story please give the following information

Orientation:

Complicating Action(s):

Conflict:

Resolution:

Main characters

Names? 

Personalities?

Important Details?

Setting

Where does this story take place?

What specific details make this place special?

November 16- Short Stories

Voice

I woke up early today and came to class. 
It's Friday. That means I have Basic Writing. There are lots of difficult assignments. We spend a lot of time writing and brainstorming in class. I guess we are going to work on short stories today.






Notation
Litotes
Surprises
Retrograde
Prognostication
Precision
Narrative



Functional Outline for a Short Story

Characters: 

List each of the main characters: 

What kinds of people are they? 

What important details do we learn about each character? 

Setting:

Where does this take place? What various settings do we read about?

What details do we learn about the various settings? 

What feeling do you get from the settings of the story?  Why? 

Conflict: 

What is the major conflict? 

Why is this conflict important to the characters in the story?  What motivates the main character?

How is the conflict resolved? 

Structure: 

“The Cask of Amontillado” has several distinct sections. 

Introducing characters

Setting One:  “At the carnival / on the street”

Setting Two:  “Staircase to the tombs under the palace”

Setting Three:  “Small Room / tomb”

Resolution / Evaluation

- Developing a Character

Blog Assignment for November 15 and Homework for November 16

I posted the assignments below, but just in case, I have pasted the assignment here as well.


* Blog HW:  Please upload your short story by Thursday, November 15th at 12:00 noon.  You can use either of the two clips we watched in class, or you can try writing about a personal experience.  Be sure that you write the story from a third person omniscent perspective. At means you should include the perspectives (thoughts, feelings, perceptions) of two to three people from the clip. We will talk about these in more detail next week. 

HW #2: Find a short story (written in English) that you really like. You can find a number of great examples at this website. Please choose one story, print it out, and bring it to class next week, November, 16

November 9: Intro to Short Stories

Writing for precision and accuracy

          - Describe the picture in one paragraph
          - Swap descriptions
          - Try to draw the picture that your partner described
          - Write down any expressions that you would need to learn in order to describe this picture

First person: (includes the thoughts and perspective of one main character, who's telling his/her own story)
As I walked up the hill, I realized that the atmosphere was just too quiet. There was no sound from the cardinal who was nearly always singing from the top of the maple tree. I thought I saw a shadow move high up on the slope, but when I looked again it was gone. Still, I shuddered as I felt a silent threat pass over me like a cloud over the sun.


Third person selective singular: (includes the thoughts and perspective of one main character)
As she walked up the hill, she realized that the atmosphere was just too quiet. There was no sound from the cardinal who she so often heard singing from the top of the maple tree. She thought she saw a shadow move high up on the slope, but when she looked again it was gone. Nevertheless, she shuddered as she felt a silent threat pass over her. It felt like a cloud creeping over the sun.



Third person omniscient: (all-knowing; can include thoughts and perspective of all characters)
As the girl walked up the hill, she realized that the atmosphere was just too quiet. 
The cardinal tipped his head back and drew breath to sing, but just as the first note passed his beak he heard the crack of a dead branch far below his perch high in the maple tree. Startled, he looked down, cocking his head to one side and watching with great interest while the man rattled the blades of grass as he tried to hide himself behind the tree.

As the man saw her start up the hill, he moved quickly into the shelter of the huge old maple tree. If she saw him now, everything would be ruined.

She thought she saw a shadow move high up on the slope, but when she looked again it was gone.

The man thought if he could stay hidden until she came within range, she'd have to talk to him. Wouldn't she?

The girl shuddered as she felt a silent threat pass over her. It felt like a cloud creeping over the sun.

* Blog HW:  Please upload your short story to by Thursday, November 15th at 12:00 noon.  You can use either of the two clips above, or you can try writing about a personal experience.  Be sure that you write the story from a third person omniscent perspective. At means you should include the perspectives (thoughts, feelings, perceptions) of two to three people from the clip. We will talk about these in more detail next week. 

HW #2: Find a short story (written in English) that you really like. You can find a number of great examples at this website. Please choose one story, print it out, and bring it to class next week, November, 16

Blog Assignment Due Nov 8

Just a reminder...
Please post reflections on your reporting assignments to your blog by 12:00 noon on Thursday November 8th.  You can either write a paragraph or two or make a list of possible problems with your news reports.  You should use the papers that we filled out during class last week (the "reporting reflections" and "peer editing" forms) and explain what you believe you will have to change when you write your final draft for the writing portfolio. 

Also, anyone who did not turn in your functional outline, outline, and reporting rough draft last week, please do so by our next class (Nobember 9) for partial credit. 

Feel free to e-mail me with any questions. 

Have a great week

P.S.  According to the vote we took in class last week, more people want to write "short stories" for genre three! 

November 2

- Vote on Genre Three: 



Concise writing warm-up:

1)  In terms of the size of its land, Canada is the second-largest country in the world.




2)  As anyone can see, most people have been affected by television in such a way that their appreciation of live theater has obviously become less and less. 

Television made most people to appreciate live theater less.

As most people have been affected by television their appreciation of live theater has obviously become less.
People's appreciation of live theater reduces due to tv. 

TV reduced most people's appreciation of live theater. 

not yet

Most people are affected by tv in a way that their appreciation of live theater has become less.

TV made live theater less popular. 





3)  It has been shown that the length of the common cold can be reduced by giving the person with the cold doses of zinc glutonate in the form of lozenges.




4)  In the time in which we live, people just can hardly be independed any longer.  Look what is happening to them in the field of education.  They cannot think for themselves.  This is also true in other areas of life. 

Today in many areas of live it is hard to be independent.  For example, students cannot think for themselves. 

People are interdependent in many areas of life including the education field. 

Now people are dependent. 

Nowadays people are not independent enough to think for themselves. 

People are dependent.  Not only can they not think for themselves but also true in life (?). 

These days people cannot live alone. 

People are less independent these days. 

Today people cannot be independent.  In education students can't think for themselves. 





5)  Food, shelter, and fire will be needed by everyone on the island.  Therefore, I will search over and over the island until I find the materials that are needed to build or make these three necessary items. 





- Peer editing





Writing practice for precision and detail