October 26: Concise Writing

Description and Explanation

Description >  His shoes slid across the floor as he strutted into the classroom. 



Explanation >  The teacher entered.  /  The teacher looked arrogant as he entered. 

10 phrases that are often unnecessary or redundant: 

All things considered

As a matter of fact

At the present time

Due to the fact that

For the purpose of / In order to

In his opinion

In the case of

In the process of

The point he is trying to make

What I mean to say is

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Some redundant sentences:  Please rewrite these sentences as concisely as possible

1. At this point in time we can't ascertain the reason as to why the screen door was left open.

2. My sister, who is employed as a nutritionist at the University of Michigan, recommends the daily intake of megadoses of Vitamin C

3. Basically, in light of the fact that Congressman Fuenches was totally exhausted by his last campaign, there was an expectation on the part of the voters that he would not reduplicate his effort to achieve office in government again

4. It is to be hoped that we discover a means to create an absolutely proper and fitting tribute to Professor Espinoza.

5. There is a desire on the part of many of us to maintain a spring recess for the purpose of getting away from the demands of our studies.

6. Joe was an honest and hard working man. Basically, he never gave much consideration to sitting idly about, doing nothing constructive.

7. What is your basic understanding of predestination?

8. At what point in time will a downturn in the stock market have a really serious effect on the social life of people as a whole?

9. I would call your attention to the fact that our President, who was formerly the Governor of Arkansas, is basically a Southerner.

10. Bothered by allergies, a condition that made them sneeze, some of the preschool children had sinus troubles that caused them to miss several days in nursery school this spring.

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Some concise introductions to news reports

'Gangnam Style' means business

By Kim Tong-hyung

The Export-Import Bank of Korea (Korea Eximbank) is holding a conference today at the Shilla Hotel in Seoul on the prospects of Korea’s cultural and entertainment industries and their future place in the national economy.

The event, also backed by the Ministry of Culture, Sports and Tourism and the Korea Creative Content Agency (KCCA), aims to provide a platform for showbiz representatives, policymakers, financial industry people and scholars to share their ideas on finding the right models for supporting and financing Korea’s pop-cultural exports.

'Dokdo School' to be launched in March

By Yi Whan-woo

The Independence Hall of Korea said Wednesday it will begin an educational program called “Dokdo School” next year after Korea’s easternmost islets that are the subject of a territorial dispute with Japan.

The memorial center, located in Cheonan, South Chungcheong Province, said the program will be launched on March 1, a national holiday to commemorate Korean resistance to Japanese colonial rule in 1919.

“The purpose of the school is to raise awareness of the sovereignty dispute between the two countries over Dokdo, and to educate people as to why the rocky islets belong to Korea,” said Kim Nung-jin, the president of the Independence Hall.